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                         a midsummer's evening
                          the sun burns crimson
                     sinking slowly into the horizon
                     another day draws to an end
                     we stand watching the twilight

             the fireflies take wing for their dance

                      you stare into the dying light
                         entranced as if by a spell
                      in your eyes i see your peace
                    your contentment shows through
                        something inside me stirs

             the fireflies dance in the simple ring

                       i realize for the first time
                   perhaps the caring i feel for you
                the warmth i feel from your presence
                 perhaps that is more than friendship
                   perhaps it runs deeper than that

             the fireflies twirl and weave faster

                      i see you as a new person
                   i notice the immaculate details
                        the light in your eyes
                     the way your body moves
                 things that make you who you are

                the fireflies come to a frenzy
                         
                     the sun has gone down now
                   the crickets play their symphony
                       i realize its time to go back
                 the magic of the moment has ended
                    a midsummer's night has come

               the fireflies scatter into the world
©2003-2009 ~HagaDelFuego
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something i wrote up as long time ago and just found while I was cleaning out my desk

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:iconfuu-inverse:
This is beautiful! The images, the flow, it's perfect! :thumbsup:
:icondulistno9:
* gasp* such beauty you have painted with your words

We all have once experienced such a feeling beyond companionship, but i have found non that could describe it... until now

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All is fair in love and war
:icongoofyromantic:
I don't know how to even describe it..man, that's good. It's just so well-developed, you know? Plus the imgaery of course is beautiful. Good ideas in this too, good job dude.
:iconecho999:
excellent imagery...only comment is that the word crimson is overused as a describe hues of red. might i suggest something like scarlet or perhaps ruby anything would work in place of crimson...but over all this is beautiful
:iconnamelessraven:
Meh, I've never been a huge fan of prose poetry, but the scheme atleast is interesting

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Masks are guises for mystery and surprises, but the eyes were made in these disguises, for you to see the faces of every person you deceive, and to know them, but to know they'll never know you however naive.
:iconaxsuraziel:
i love the imagery used it's very vivid. keep it up.
:icontheboythatneverwas:
Wow, this is great. Good mental images came to me as I was reading it. Good job.
:iconmyleftfootstinksofsh:
I really like this, it just all fits together well and it has some good descriptions of features in the poem
:iconnekojack:
i think this is an amazing peice of work... you should get it published, because the imagery is everything i always wanted to sapture, and i think it is incredibly beautiful.

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i'm the kid on the back of the milk carton.

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December 23, 2003
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